Homework: Proofreading and Revision
by Eric Paul Monroe on May.12, 2008, under Older Homework
Here I proofread my students’ homework, highlighting grammar, syntax, orthographic, and punctuation errors in addition to stylistic concerns. Students should revise and proofread their work before ultimate submission.
May 12th, 2008 on 06:12
Dear Eric,
There`s my homework; where i`ll talk about some of an Ancient Egyptian god and goddesses and also about an Egyptian myth about the creation of the world…
let me start: 1st. part:
Some of the Egyptian gods and goddesses:
1- Anubis god: He was a man with a jackal head, and black body, where ancient egyptians used that color for death and night. Anubis was the god of the Embalment, Necropolis, Mummification, and also he was an important part of the judgment of the dead, he was the one who could tell if that soul worthy to enter the afterlife or not with his scale of truth. The ancient egyptian believed that Anubis was watched over the dead ( since the jackal seen in cemeteries). There`s a myth that mentioned that Anubis helped Isis to embalm Osiris. priests used to wor a mask of Anubis during the mummification and the opening of mouth ceremonies.
2- Bast goddess: She appeared as a woman with a head of a cat, and sometimes with a head of a lioness to protect the king in battle. She was a protective goddess, she also was the goddess of fire, cats, the home and pregnant women. an old myth mentioned that Bast was personification of the soul of Isis. Ancient egyptians made many statues of cats to honour Bast, and also they built a great temple for her at Bubastis in the Delta.
3- Isis: She appeared as a woman wearing a headdress of a throne with the solar disk between a pair of horns, and sometimes wearing the crowns of upper and lower Egypt. She was a protective goddess, and used her powerful magic spells to help people in need. She also was a good example for chaste and devoted wife. She was the daughter of Nut and Geb, and the sister and wife of Osiris ( she also was the sister of Seth and Nyphthys), and the mother of Horus. The ancient egyptians made Amulets for her and these amulets called ” the knot of Isis”, they also buit a temple for her at Philae.
4- Osiris: He appeared as a mummified man wearing a white cone-like headdress with feathers. He known as the god of dead ,the ruler of the underworld, and the resurrection and fertility god. Ancient egyptians believed that he gave them the civilization, and tought them how to farm , and also gave them the gift of Barley one of their most important croups. He was the son of Nut and Geb and the brother and husband of Isis, he also was the father of Horus by Isis and Anubis by Nyphthys which seduced him to conceive Anubis. Osiris ( The god of the Fertility) was known as a kind and good king, which inherited his throne from his father Geb ( The god of the Earth), he was hated by his brother Seth ( The god of Desert and Storms), so Seth plotted to have his brother killed to gain the throne, he make a coffin with the measurement of Osiris by the help of some conspirators from the court of Osiris, then he suggest a game to see who will fit that pretty coffin and the winner will can keep it, after some convincing from Seth and his conspirators Osiris agreed to try the coffin, once he entered it, Seth nailed the lin and threw the coffin into the Nile. Isis searched for her husband all over Egypt, once she had found him she tried to hide him with the help of Nyphthys, but Seth dicovered him by a chance on a hunting trip, then he cut his body into fourteen pieces and threw them in the Nile. Then Isis reassembled him , and relife him with her magic power, but he can`t stay because he became an important part of the afterlife world, so she used her powers again to conceive Horus by Osiris to avenge his father`s death. ( Therefore in the egyptian dead book, Isis known as the giver of food and life to the dead). Horus fought a very long and bloody battle against his uncle Seth, but finally he regained the throne and became the king. For the old egyptians this story became a symbol for the value of the family, devotion of the wife, and of good over evil.
The 2nd. part: The myth of the creation of the world:
At first, there was Nun ( The dark water of the chaos), then a hill rose up out of the water called Ben-Ben. On this hill stood Autm, the first god, he coughed and spat out Shu (The god of the Air) and Tefnut ( The god of moisture). Then they had two children Geb ( the god of the Earth) and Nut (The god of the Sky), after that Shu raised up Nut, so she became a canopy for Geb, and they had four children: Osiris, Isis, Seth, and Nyphthys. Osiris became the king after his father and married his sister Isis, while Seth married Nyphthys. Osiris was killed by his brother, but his son Horus avenge his father`s killed and regain the throne.
The End.
Hope u like what i have done, Eric. i`ll be waiting for my grade impatiently. Thank you for your time.
Berry
May 13th, 2008 on 00:18
Dear Eric,
This is my homework, where I`ll talk about some Ancient Egyptian gods and goddesses and also Egyptian myth about the creation of the world…
A- Some Egyptian gods and goddesses:
1- Anubis:
He was a man with a jackal head and black body, where ancient Egyptians used that color to express death and night. Anubis was the god of embalment, necropolis, mummification, and he was an important part of the judgment of the dead. He was the one who could tell if the soul is worth to enter the afterlife or not with his scale of truth. The ancient Egyptians believed that Anubis watched over the dead (Since the jackal had seen in cemeteries).
There were a myth mentioned that Anubis helped Isis to embalm Osiris. Priests used to wore a mask of Anubis during the mummification and the opening of mouth ceremonies.
2- Bast:
She appeared as a woman with a head of a cat, and sometimes with a head of a lioness to protect the king in battle. She was a protective goddess and she also was the goddess of fire, cats, the home and pregnant women.
An old myth mentioned that Bast was personification of the soul of Isis. Ancient Egyptians made many statues of cats to honour Bast and they built a great temple for her at Bubastis in the delta.
3- Isis:
She appeared as a woman wearing a headdress of a throne with the solar disk between a pair of horns, and sometimes wearing the crowns of upper and lower Egypt. She was a protective goddess and used her powerful magic spells to help people in need. She also was a good example for chaste and devoted wife.
She was the daughter of Nut and Geb, the sister and wife of Osiris (She also was the sister of Seth and Nyphthys), and the mother of Horus.
The ancient Egyptians made amulets for her and these amulets were called ” the knot of Isis”. They also built a temple for her at Philae.
4- Osiris:
He appeared as a mummified man wearing a white cone-like headdress with feathers.
He was known as the god of the dead, the ruler of the underworld, and the resurrection and fertility god.
Ancient Egyptians believed that he gave them civilization, and taught them how to farm , and also gave them the gift of barley one of their most important crops.
He was the son of Nut and Geb and the brother and husband of Isis.He also was the father of Horus by Isis and Anubis by Nyphthys which seduced him to conceive Anubis.
Osiris (The god of Fertility) was known as a kind and good king, which inherited his throne from his father Geb (The god of the Earth) but he was hated by his brother Seth (The god of desert and storms), so Seth plotted to have his brother killed to gain the throne by making a coffin with the measurements of Osiris by the help of conspirators from the court of Osiris.
Then he suggest a game to see who would fit that pretty coffin and the winner could keep it and after convincing from Seth and his conspirators, Osiris agreed to try the coffin but once he entered it, Seth nailed the lid and threw the coffin into the Nile.
Isis searched for her husband all over Egypt and once she had found him she tried to hide him with the help of Nyphthys, but Seth dicovered him by chance on a hunting trip; then he cut his body into fourteen pieces and threw them in the Nile. Then Isis reassembled him and trying to get him back to life with her magic power, but he couldn`t stay because he became an important part of the afterlife world, so she used her powers again to conceive Horus by Osiris to avenge his fathers` death.
Therefore in the Egyptian book of the dead, Isis was known as the giver of food and life to the dead.
Horus fought a long and bloody battle against his uncle Seth, but finally he regained the throne and became the king. For the old Egyptians, this story became a symbol for the value of the family, devotion of the wife, and of good over evil.
B- The myth of the creation of the world:
At first, there was Nun (The dark water of the chaos), then a hill rose up out of the water called Ben-Ben. On this hill stood Autm, the first god.
He coughed and spat out Shu (The god of the Air) and Tefnut (The god of the moisture).Then they had two children Geb (The god of the Earth) and Nut (The god of the Sky)and after that Shu raised up Nut, so she became a canopy for Geb, and they had four children: Osiris, Isis, Seth, and Nyphthys. Osiris became the king after his father and married his sister Isis, while Seth married Nyphthys. Osiris was killed by his brother, but his son Horus avenged his fathers` death and regained the throne.
The End.
Hope you like what I have done, Eric.
I`ll be waiting for my grade impatiently.
Thank you for your time.
Berry
May 22nd, 2008 on 18:08
I would rather rewrite the introduction as below. What do you think about it?
“My piece of writing will discuss the myths about a number of Egyptian gods ,goddesses and the creation of the world”
@Berry: Did you really write an essay that long? It must have required a lot of time and efforts.
May 24th, 2008 on 21:35
Hi Quan,
Yes I did. And it didn`t take much time, to be honest just three hours for writing.
It was really so interesting and useful.
Hope it was the same for you.
Thanks.
Berry
May 24th, 2008 on 22:28
Dear Eric,
It was not easy to choose a pet to talk about, but as I mentioned before I respect and like the intelligent ones.So I decided to handle one of the fastest and strongest animals.
Horses
They are a beautiful animals, elegant, graceful, very athletic and highly energetic.
Horse were wild animals in the beginning. They are hunted for they skin as well as meat, but things changed and people began taming horses and using them to carry things. They also have been used for domestic chores and have formed a very warm bond with humans.
In the past they have played an important role in transportation, agriculture and wars.
The Arabian horse is a breed of horse which well known for its remarkable intelligence, spirit, stamina, good nature and grace in movement. It is the most expensive and cherished as well.
Here are some interesting facts about horses:
• Horses are belonging to the family “Equus”. This word comes from ancient Greece and means quickness.
• I f you want to know how old a horse is, all you want to do is to count its teeth.
• A male horse is known as a stallion. A female horse known as a mare. The baby one called a foal.
• Adult female horse have 34 teeth, while the adult male horse have between 40-44 teeth.
• Horses can`t breathe through their mouths.
• Horses can`t vomit.
• They can sleep standing up.
• Horses usually live for 20-25 years. Some of them can live up to 5 years more.
• A horse is able to drink ten gallons of water per day.
• The hoof of a horse is keep on growing; like a fingernail and need to be clipped regularly.
• Horses are usually black, brown, cream or grey in color.
• Horse have monocular vision which means they can see two different images at once.
• They have a better vision at night than humans and they can see colored dreams.
• Horses use their facial expressions to communicate.
Well, what do you think about that, Eric?
P.S. I tried to make it as short as possible.
Berry
May 28th, 2008 on 15:19
Dear Quan,
Yes, I did, but writing didn`t take much time. To be honest just three hours.
Searching and writing were really so interesting and useful.
Hope it was useful for you too.
Thanks.
Berry
Good improvement.
May 28th, 2008 on 15:44
Dear Eric,
Choosing a pet to talk about was not easy, but as I mentioned before I respect and like the intelligent ones.Therefore, I decided to handle one of the fastest and strongest animals.
Horses
They are beautiful animals, elegant, graceful, athletic and highly energetic.
Horses were wild animals in the beginning. They are hunted for their skin as well as meat, but things changed and people began taming horses and using them to carry things.
They also have been used for domestic chores and have formed a warm bond with humans.
In the past they have played an important role in transportation, agriculture and wars.
The Arabian horse is a breed which, well known for its remarkable intelligence, spirit, stamina, good nature and grace in movement.
The Arabian horse is the most expensive and cherished as well.
Here are some interesting facts about horses:
• Horses are belonging to the family “Equus”. This word comes from ancient Greece and means quickness.
• If you want to know how old a horse is, all you have to do is to count his teeth.
• A male horse is known as a stallion. A female horse known as a mare. The young horse (four years or younger), is known as a foal.
• Adult female have 34 teeth, while adult male horse have between 40-44 teeth.
• Horses can`t breathe through their mouths.
• Horses can`t vomit.
• They can sleep standing up.
• Horses usually live for 20-25 years. Some of them can live up to 5 years more.
• A horse is able to drink ten gallons of water per day.
• The hoof of a horse is like a fingernail; it keeps on growing and need to be clipped regularly.
• Horses are usually black, brown, cream or grey in color.
• Horse have monocular vision which means they can see two different images at once.
• They have a better vision at night than humans and they can see colored dreams.
• Horses use their facial expressions to communicate.
Well, what do you think about that, Eric?
P.S. I tried to make it as short as possible.
Berry
June 1st, 2008 on 19:19
Dear Eric,
Choosing a pet to talk about was not easy, but as I mentioned before I respect and like the intelligent ones. Therefore, I decided to handle one of the fastest and strongest animals.
Horses
They are beautiful animals, elegant, graceful, athletic and highly energetic.
Horses were wild animals in the beginning. They are hunted for their skin as well as meat, but times changed and people began taming horses and using them to carry goods and luggages.
They also have been used for domestic chores and have formed a warm bond with humans.
In the past they have played an important role in transportation, agriculture and wars.
The Arabian horse is a breed who, well known for its remarkable intelligence, spirit, stamina, good nature and grace in movement.
The Arabian horse is the most expensive and cherished as well.
Here are interesting facts about horses:
• Horses are belonging to the family “Equus”. This word comes from ancient Greeks and means quickness.
• If you want to know how old a horse is, all you have to do is to count his teeth.
• A male horse, is known as a stallion. A female horse, known as a mare. The young horse (four years or younger), is known as a foal .
• Adult female , have 34 teeth, while adult male horse , have between 40-44 teeth.
• Horses can`t breathe through their mouths.
• Horses can`t vomit.
• They can sleep standing up.
• Horses usually live for 20-25 years. Some of them can live up to 5 years more.
• A horse is able to drink ten gallons of water per day.
• The hoof of a horse is like a fingernail; it keeps on growing and needs to be clipped regularly.
• Horses are usually black, brown, cream or grey in color.
• Horse have monocular vision which means they can see two different images at once.
• They have a better vision at night than humans and they can see colored dreams.
• Horses use their facial expressions to communicate.
Well, what do you think about that, Eric?
P.S. I tried to make it as short as possible.
Berry
Keep in mind temporal concordance and subject-verb agreement.
June 7th, 2008 on 03:54
Dear Eric,
Choosing a pet to talk about was not easy, but as I mentioned before I respect and like the intelligent ones. Therefore, I decided to handle one of the fastest and strongest animals.
Horses
They are beautiful animals, elegant, graceful, athletic and highly energetic.
Horses were wild animals in the beginning. They were hunted for their skin as well as meat, but times changed and people began taming horses and using them to carry goods and luggage.
They also have been used for domestic chores and have formed a warm bond with humans.
In the past they had played an important role in transportation, agriculture and war warfare (lexical development).
The Arabian horse is a breed, well known for its remarkable intelligence, spirit, stamina, good nature, and grace in movement.
The Arabian horse is the most expensive and cherished as well.
Here are a number of interesting facts about horses:
• Horses are belonging to the family “Equus”. This word comes from ancient Greek and means quickness.
• If you want to know how old a horse is, all you have to do is to count his teeth.
• A male horse, is known as a stallion. A female horse, is known as a mare. A young horse, (four years or younger), is known as a foal.
• Adult female, have 34 teeth, while adult male horse, have between 40-44 teeth. Utilize plurality for generalization.
• Horses can`t breathe through their mouths.
• Horses can`t vomit.
• They can sleep standing up.
• Horses usually live for 20-25 years. Some of them can live up to 30 years.
• A horse is able to drink ten gallons of water per day.
• The hoof of a horse is like a fingernail; it keeps on growing and needs to be clipped regularly.
• Horses are usually black, brown, cream or grey in color.
• Horse have monocular vision which means they can see two different images at once.
• They have a better vision at night than humans and they can see dreams with all the different colours, not just black and white have dreams in color.
• Horses use their facial expressions to communicate.
Well, what do you think about that, Eric?
P.S. I tried to make it as short as possible.
Berry
Great improvement, Berry!
June 7th, 2008 on 11:06
Dear Eric,
Could you please remove my two overlapped posts? Thank you! Removed.
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Clear and concise, Quan…
June 8th, 2008 on 18:14
Dear Eric,
Traveling has become an integral component of human society for generations. How to take an ideal trip is a thorny question puzzling a myriad of travelers. A number of opinions claim that self-touring allows people to fully enjoy destinations. However, I personally prefer journeying in a group with professional service of a tour guide
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Why did you forget to indent the second and third paragraphs?
June 8th, 2008 on 21:23
Dear Eric,
Choosing a pet to talk about was not easy, but as I mentioned before I respect and like the intelligent ones. Therefore, I decided to handle one of the fastest and strongest animals.
Horses
They are beautiful animals, elegant, graceful, athletic and highly energetic syntax.
Horses were wild animals in the beginning. They were hunted for their skin as well as meat, but times changed and people began taming horses and using them to carry goods and luggage.
They also have been used for domestic chores and have formed a warm bond with humans.
In the past they had played an important role in transportation, agriculture and warfare.
The Arabian horse is a breed, well known for its remarkable intelligence, spirit, stamina, good nature, and grace in movement.
The Arabian horse is the most expensive and cherished as well. combine sentences
Here are a number of interesting facts about horses:
• Horses are belonging to the family “Equus”. This word comes from ancient Greek and means quickness.
• If you want to know how old a horse is, all you have to do is to count his avoid gender discrimination teeth.
• Male horses, are known as stallion subject-verb agreement. Female horses, are known as mare . Young horses, (four years or younger), are known as foal .
• Adult females, have 34 teeth, while adult male horses, punctuation usage have between 40-44 teeth.
• Horses can`t breathe through their mouths.
• Horses can`t vomit.
• They can sleep standing up.
• Horses usually live for 20-25 years. Some of them lexical development can live up to 30 don’t be lazy years.
• A horse is able to drink ten gallons of water per day.
• The hoof of a horse is like a fingernail; it keeps on growing and needs to be clipped regularly.
• Horses are usually black, brown, cream or grey in color.
• Horse have monocular vision which means they can see two different images at once.
• They have a better night vision than humans and they redundant have dreams in color.
• Horses use their facial expressions to communicate.
Well, what do you think about that, Eric?:)
Berry
June 16th, 2008 on 21:28
Dear Eric,
Today I will talk about one of the well known Egyptian queens;the beautiful queen Nefertari who stole Ramesses` heart. Nefertari Merytmut or Mut-Nefertari which means beautiful companion, or the most beautiful of them. Egyptologists claim that nothing is known about her parents, but it seems she was of royal birth. Our queen was exquisite, her beauty was flawless, and she was the loveliest sight to see. Nefertari was the great royal wife of Ramesses the great and they had four sons and two daughters.Although she was not the only consort of Ramesses II,(there were four other wifes), Nefertari was his beloved one and he reffered to her as “the one for whom the sun shines”, and in a very unusual act Ramesses built a smaller temple for her jointly with the goddess Hathor nearby his temple at Abu-Simbel; as temples were usually dedicated to deities not humans, her statue is also depicted as being equal in size to Ramesses, which show in a kind of certainity her importance to the pharaoh, and also indicating that she wasn`t an ordinary queen, where none of the Egyptian queens had been held in such honor.So, we can say she played a special and important role in her time and that is apparent from her titles which were: King`s wife, Lady of charm, Sweet of love, Great royal wife; his beloved, Lady of all lands, Lady of Upper and Lower Egypt, Lady of grace, Great of favors, and Pretty with two feathers.
Nefertari died in her forties, her own tomb called by the Ancients “The place of beauty”. This tomb is the most beautiful and famous of all the queens and it is also the summit of Art in Egypt. On the walls of her tomb, she is represented wearing long transparent white garments, with two long feathers headdress of gold. She wears jewels, bracelets in addition to a wide golden collar.
Because Nefertari was his beloved wife; Ramesses written poetry about her on the walls of her burial chamber:
After his tender words, I have nothing to say, but the lady of charm didn`t steal his heart alone, she stole our hearts too.
Hope you enjoyed this essay…:)
First slideshow integration. Fantastic job, Berry!
June 18th, 2008 on 22:36
Dear Eric,
Today we will handle one of the best known Egyptian queens, the beautiful queen Nefertari who stole Ramesses´ heart. Nefertari Merytmut or Mut-Nefertari which means beautiful companion or the most beautiful of them. Egyptologists claim that they know nothing about her parents except she was of royal birth.The queen was exquisite, her beauty was flawless, and she was the loveliest sight to see. Nefertari was the great royal wife of Ramesses The Great and they had four sons and two daughters. Although she was not the only consort of Ramesses II,(there were four other wives), Nefertari was his beloved one and he referred to her as “the one for whom the sun shines”, and in an unusual act Ramesses built a smaller temple for her jointly with the goddess Hathor nearby his temple at Abu-Simbel as temples were usually dedicated to deities not humans. Her statue is also depicted as being equal in size to Ramesses, which show in a kind of certainty her importance to the pharaoh, and also indicating that she wasn´t an ordinary queen, where none of the Egyptian queens had been held in such honor. So she played a vital role in her time and that is apparent from her titles which were: King`s wife, Lady of charm, Sweet love, Great royal wife; his beloved, Lady of all lands, Lady of Upper and Lower Egypt, Lady of grace, Great of favors, and Pretty with two feathers.
Nefertari died in her forties. Her own tomb called by the Ancients “The place of beauty”. This tomb is the most beautiful and famous of all the queens and it is also the summit of Art in Egypt. On the walls of her tomb, she is represented wearing long transparent white garments, with two long golden feather headdress. She wears jewels and bracelets in addition to a wide golden collar.
Because Nefertari was his beloved wife Ramesses wrote poetry about her on the walls of her burial chamber:
After his tender words, I have nothing to say, but the lady of charm didn`t steal his heart alone, she stole our hearts too.
Hope you enjoyed this essay…
June 23rd, 2008 on 20:34
The beautiful queen Nefertari who stole Ramesses´ heart Not a complete sentence. Nefertari Merytmut or Mut-Nefertari which means beautiful companion or the most beautiful of them Incomplete sentence. Egyptologists claim that they know nothing about her parents except Relative pronoun better here. she was of royal birth.
The queen was exquisite, her beauty was flawless, and she was the loveliest sight to see. Nefertari was the great royal wife of Ramesses The Great and they had four sons and two daughters. Although she was not the only consort of Ramesses II(there were four other wives), Nefertari was his beloved one and he referred to her as “the one for whom the sun shines”, and in an unusual act, Ramesses built a smaller temple for her jointly with the goddess Hathor nearby his temple at Abu-Simbel, as temples were usually dedicated to deities not humans. Her statue is also depicted as being equal in size to Ramesses, which showing present indicative needed… her importance to the pharaoh. She also wasn´t an ordinary lexical development queen, where none of the Egyptian queens had been held in such honor. So she played a vital role in her time and that is apparent from her titles which were Paraphrase.: King`s wife, Lady of charm, Sweet love, Great royal wife; His beloved, Lady of all lands, Lady of Upper and Lower Egypt, Lady of grace, Great of favors, and Pretty with two feathers.
Nefertari died in her forties. Her own tomb called Correct your verb. by the ancients “The place of beauty”. This Paraphrase. tomb is the most beautiful and famous of all the queens and it is also the top lexical development of art in Egypt. On the walls of her tomb, she is represented wearing long transparent white garments, with two long golden feather headdress. She wears jewels and bracelets in addition to a wide golden collar.
Because Nefertari was Ramesses´ beloved wife, he wrote poetry about her on the walls of her burial chamber:
After his tender words, I have nothing to say, but the lady of charm didn`t steal his heart alone, she stole our hearts too.
Hope you enjoyed this essay…
Be diligent, proofread your work, and revise until you can not do better.
June 24th, 2008 on 15:27
Queen Nefertari
The beautiful queen Nefertari who stole Ramesses´ heart, No punctuation here is necessary. is one of the best known Egyptian queens.
Nefertari Merytmut or Mut-Nefertari which Delete. means beautiful companion.
Egyptologists claim that she was of royal birth, but their information not including who were her wordy: clear and concise… parents.
The queen was exquisite, her beauty was flawless, and she was the loveliest sight to see Paraphrase and combine. Nefertari was the great royal wife of Ramesses The Great and they had four sons and two daughters. Although she was not the only consort of Ramesses II(there were four other wives), Nefertari was his beloved one and he referred to her as “the one for whom the sun shines”, and in an unusual act, Ramesses built a smaller temple for her jointly with the goddess Hathor nearby his temple at Abu-Simbel, as temples were usually dedicated to deities not humans. Her statue is also depicted as being equal in size to Ramesses, which indicating indicates how important she was.
She also was a different and unusual queen, where none of the Egyptian queens had been held in such honor. So she played a vital role in her time and had many titles like:
King`s wife, Lady of charm, Sweet love, Great royal wife; His beloved, Lady of all lands, Lady of Upper and Lower Egypt, Lady of grace, Great of favors, and Pretty with two feathers.
Nefertari died in her forties. Her own tomb were known
by the ancients as “The place of beauty”. Nefertari Nefertari’s tomb is the most beautiful and famous of all the queens and it is also the best example of art in Egypt. On the walls of her tomb, she is represented wearing long transparent white garments with two long golden feather headdress subject agreement: headdresses. She wears jewels and bracelets in addition to a wide golden collar.
Because Nefertari was Ramesses´ beloved wife, he wrote poetry about her on the walls of her burial chamber:
After his tender words, I have nothing to say, but the lady of charm didn`t steal his heart alone, she stole our hearts too.
Hope you find it much better than previous before…
Great improvement, Berry!
June 27th, 2008 on 00:37
Queen Nefertari
The beautiful queen Nefertari who stole Ramesses´ heart is one of the best known Egyptian queens.
Nefertari Merytmut or logic problem: and Mut-Nefertari means beautiful companion. Egyptologists claim that she was of royal birth.
The queen was exquisite and beautiful. Nefertari was the great royal wife of Ramesses The Great and they had four sons and two daughters. Although she was not the only consort of Ramesses II (there were four other wives), Nefertari was his beloved one and he referred to her as “the one for whom the sun shines”, and in an unusual act, Ramesses built a smaller temple for her jointly with the goddess Hathor nearby his temple at Abu-Simbel, as temples were usually dedicated to deities not humans. Her statue is also depicted as being equal in size to Ramesses, which indicates how important she was.
She also was a different and unusual logic: don’t they say the same thing? queen, where none of the Egyptian queens had been held in such honor. So she played a vital role in her time and had many titles like:
King`s wife, Lady of charm, Sweet love, Great royal wife; His beloved, Lady of all lands, Lady of Upper and Lower Egypt, Lady of grace, Great of favors, and Pretty with two feathers.
Nefertari died in her forties. Her own tomb were subject-verb agreement known
by the ancients as “The place of beauty”. Nefertari’s tomb is the most beautiful and famous of all the queens and it is also the best example of art in Egypt. On the walls of her tomb, she is represented wearing long transparent white garments with two long golden feather headdresses. She wears jewels and bracelets in addition to a wide golden collar.
Because Nefertari was Ramesses´ beloved wife, he wrote poetry about her on the walls of her burial chamber:
After his tender words, I have nothing to say, but the lady of charm didn`t steal his heart alone, she stole our hearts too.
Hope you find it much better than before…
Great improvement, Berry!
June 27th, 2008 on 18:02
Higher education has occupied a vital position in learning system in recent decades. How to tailor a curriculum which delivers optimal learning experience to university students has become a thorny conundrum puzzling educators for years. A large number of institutions of higher education compel educatees to concentrate on merely one subject. However, I am convinced that at universities and colleges, students should be required to attend classes on a variety of subjects.
A diverse curriculum is certain to stimulate learners’ efforts to study. Although a single-subject curriculum is admittedly able to prompt undergraduates to channel almost all energy to dig deeper into one subject and acquire profound comprehension, this syllabus is likely to bore students gradually. Nonetheless, a multi-subject curriculum is capable of maintaining learners’ interest in discovering and studying. Spending 3-4 years at a college learning only one subject business administration example? is definitely considered as extremely tedious to a multitude of students whereas a syllabus that consists of varied subjects; for example, accounting, business law and international business is bound to elicit these fledgling learners’ thirst for discovery and exert greater attempts to further explore intriguing unfamiliar disciplines. In fact, a multi-subject curriculum unambiguously overwhelms a single-subject one vis-à-vis the encouragement of students’ inspiration to learn.
… Combination of knowledge from various subjects represents an essential factor leading an individual to success in today’s highly integrated society. In a number of cases, mastering just one subject proves insufficient for a person to reach desired goals during his or her career. Instead, comprehensive and thorough understanding of related disciplines equips a learner with a crucial cutting edge to thrive positive-negative conflict. For instance, in order to become excellent marketers upon embarking on professional job, students majoring in marketing need to be provided with expertise from an array of subjects such as sociology, psychology and law which allow them to duly determine targeted market segments, firmly grasp consumer’s buying behavior and deftly maneuver business regulations to gain competitive advantages against other corporate rivals. Actually, modern world with a highly competitive environment creates a pressing demand for the perception of knowledge in multiple areas.
In conclusion, not only does a multi-discipline curriculum evoke learners’ absorption in learning but this syllabus also presents these undergraduates with exhaustive knowledge in their field of study. Thus, almost all educators are strongly recommended to widely apply this program to achieve fruitful results in higher education.
Good work, Quan. Revise to the best of your ability.
July 1st, 2008 on 14:38
Queen Nefertari
The beautiful queen Nefertari who stole Ramesses´ heart is one of the best known Egyptian queens. Nefertari Merytmut and Mut-Nefertari means subject-verb agreement: mean beautiful companion. Egyptologists claim that she was of royal birth.The queen was exquisite and beautiful. Nefertari was the great royal wife of Ramesses The Great and they had four sons and two daughters. Although she was not the only consort of Ramesses II (there were four other wives), Nefertari was his beloved one and he referred to her as “the one for whom the sun shines”, and in an unusual act, Ramesses built a smaller temple for her jointly with the goddess Hathor nearby his temple at Abu-Simbel, as temples were usually dedicated to deities not humans. Her statue is also depicted as being equal in size to Ramesses, which indicates how important she was.
She also was a different word choicequeen, where none of the Egyptian queens had been held in such honor. So she played condense: “… , playing…” a vital role in her time and had many titles like: King`s wife, Lady of charm, Sweet love, Great royal wife; His beloved, Lady of all lands, Lady of Upper and Lower Egypt, Lady of grace, Great of favors, and Pretty with two feathers.
Nefertari died in her forties. Her own tomb was known
by the ancients as “The place of beauty”. Nefertari’s tomb is the most beautiful and famous of all the queens and it is also the best example of art in Egypt. On the walls of her tomb, she is represented wearing long transparent white garments with two long golden feather headdresses. She wears jewels and bracelets in addition to a wide golden collar.
Because Nefertari was Ramesses´ beloved wife, he wrote poetry about her on the walls of her burial chamber:
After his tender words, I have nothing to say, but the lady of charm didn`t steal his heart alone, she stole our hearts too.
I think it is much better now…
I agree with you, Berry: tremendous improvement!
July 1st, 2008 on 15:56
Higher education has occupied a vital position in learning system lexical development in recent decades. How to tailor a curriculum which delivers optimal learning experience to university students has become a thorny conundrum puzzling educators for years. A large number of educational institutions of compel educatees to concentrate on merely one subject. However, I am convinced that Leave your opinion at the door: avoid writing in the first person. at universities and colleges, students should be required to attend classes on a variety of subjects.
A diverse curriculum is certain to stimulate learners’ efforts to study. Although a single-subject curriculum is admittedly able to prompt undergraduates to channel the vast majority of energy to dig deeper into one subject and acquire profound comprehension, this paraphrase syllabus might bore students gradually. Nonetheless, a multi-subject curriculum is capable of maintaining learners’ interest in more active preposition discovering and studying Stick with basic nouns. For instance, spending 3-4 years at a college learning only one subject business administration clear and concise, Quan is definitely considered extremely tedious to a multitude of students whereas a syllabus that consists of varied subjects; for example, accounting, business law and international business is bound to elicit these is the demonstrative pronoun even necessary? energetic learners’ thirst for discovery and exert greater attempts to further explore intriguing unfamiliar disciplines. In fact, a multi-subject curriculum unambiguously overwhelms a single-subject one vis-à-vis the encouragement of students’ inspiration to learn.
Combination of knowledge from a wide range of subjects represents a crucial factor leading an individual to success in today’s highly integrated society. In some paraphrase to show certainty…
cases, mastering just one subject proves insufficient for a person to reach desired goals during his or her career; meanwhile, comprehensive and thorough understanding of related disciplines equips a learner with substantial advantages. For instance, to become excellent marketers upon embarking on professional job Are you translating?, students majoring in marketing need to be provided with expertise from an array of subjects such as sociology, psychology and law which allow them Paraphrase to avoid the third person. to duly determine targeted market segments, firmly grasp consumer’s buying behavior and deftly maneuver business regulations to gain competitive advantages against corporate rivals. Indeed, modern world Translating again or did you just forget to use the indefinite article? with a highly competitive environment creates a pressing demand for the perception of knowledge in multiple areas.
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Good improvement, Quan. Continue to revise.
July 5th, 2008 on 17:56
Higher education has occupied a vital position in academic system in recent decades. How to tailor a curriculum which delivers optimal learning experience to university students has become a thorny conundrum puzzling educators for years. A large lexical development number of educational institutions compel educatees to concentrate on merely one subject. However, I am convinced that (as the topic asks for my personal opinion, I think “Think” shows uncertainty that I am compelled to mark personal sign somewhere in my writing. Actually, I myself also hate the idea of putting “I” into my essay, so I tend to use “I” just once or twice in a piece of writing) Shuffle vocabulary: first person singular personal pronoun. Quan, when you are ready to write at a higher level, let me know and I will glad to further assist you. at universities and colleges, students should be required to attend classes on a variety of subjects.
A diverse curriculum is certain to stimulate learners’ efforts to study. Although a single-subject curriculum is admittedly able to prompt undergraduates to channel the vast majority of energy to dig deeper into one subject and acquire profound comprehension, this monotonous syllabus might bore students gradually Consider placing adverbs before the main verb for additional emphasis.. Nonetheless, a multi-subject curriculum is capable of maintaining learners’ relish word choice for discovery and study. For instance, spending 3-4 Don’t be lazy, Quan: spell out numbers that are less than ten letters long. years at a college learning only the subject of business administration (I am afraid that readers might confuse the subject with the field of study) If that is the case, revise your work to make it clear and concise. The same applies to visual aids used in a business context. is definitely considered extremely tedious to a multitude of students whereas a syllabus that consists of varied subjects; for example, accounting, business law and international business is bound to elicit energetic learners’ thirst for discovery and exert greater attempts to further explore intriguing unfamiliar disciplines. In fact, a multi-subject curriculum unambiguously overwhelms a single-subject one vis-à-vis Foreign words should be presented in italics. the encouragement of students’ inspiration to learn.
Combination of knowledge from a wide range of subjects represents a crucial factor leading an individual to success in today’s highly integrated society. Occasionally, mastering just one subject proves insufficient for a person to reach desired goals during his or her career; meanwhile, comprehensive and thorough understanding of related disciplines equips a learner with substantial advantages. For instance, to become professionals, students majoring in marketing need to be provided with expertise from an array of subjects such as sociology, psychology and law which allow these unnecessary potential marketers to duly determine targeted market segments, firmly grasp consumer’s buying behavior and deftly maneuver business regulations to gain competitive advantages against corporate rivals. Indeed, the modern world with a highly competitive environment creates a pressing demand for the perception of knowledge in multiple areas.
Not only does a multi-discipline curriculum evoke learners’ absorption in learning but a syllabus comprised of more than one subject also presents these undergraduates with exhaustive knowledge in various fields of study. Thus, educators are strongly advised to widely apply this program to achieve fruitful results in higher education.
Great improvement, Quan. Now, polish your work.
July 5th, 2008 on 18:08
Illustrious figures who make considerable contributions to communities are often widely revered. Among various manners to express great admiration for outstanding individuals is the construction of these people’s statues or monuments. Should I be in a position to issue a decision upon whose statue to be built in my locality, President Hochiminh’s would undoubtedly become a prime option.
President Hochiminh is apparently a Vietnamese icon of extreme intelligence. This national hero is worldwide well-known for his excellency. One of his prominent abilities is linguistic command. Following years of traveling overseas, the President was reportedly fluent in over 10 languages, thanks to which he was able to write a large number of valuable works, both political and artistic, in various languages such as English, French and Chinese, and communicate effectively with a variety of world’s preeminent politicians on critical issues. Besides, President Hochiminh’s capability to convince people is also proof of his intellectual competence. An obvious demonstration of his persuasiveness is the success in inducing the vast majority of Vietnamese people who were unduly repressed, frightened and persecuted under the vicious colonism of France then to audaciously revolt. Indeed, the intellectual superiority of this President should be deemed an ultimate example for almost all city’s residents.
Another noble characteristic of President Hochiminh is reflected through his pure dedication to the country. The great leader expended the whole youth seeking an appropriate course for the liberation of the nation and devoted the remain of his life to the revolutionary cause. Despite facing numerous formidable obstacles from tremendous hardship to repeated imprisonment, he still pursued the goal of fighting for the independence of Vietnamese people. After the country already obtained freedom, as the most powerful leader, President Ho still garnered no privileges for himself but led a simple life as an ordinary person. Thus, the President’s devotion and self-sacrifice to the country makes immense sense to generations of Vietnamese people.
President Hochiminh with extraordinary commitment to the sake of Vietnamese people and exceptional capability completely deserves supreme honour from my city’s citizens. Therefore, responsible officials are strongly advised to step up the construction of his statue.
July 5th, 2008 on 18:15
Working has occupied an integral position in human society throughout history. Which working skill is the most important have been a thorny question perplexing people in recent decades. A number of opinions insist that individual excellence is the key to success. However, I am personally convinced the ability to work in collaborative groups proves to be a more crucial factor in today’s modern world.
Capability to work in teams represents an essential skill to become successful in job-hunting. Employers, from modest to prestigious, are reportedly considering teamwork skill as a prerequisite during their recruitment. An applicant would definitely find himself or herself compelled to participate in a session of group discussion or group presentation whenever this candidate is tempted to obtain a lucrative position in a firm. Thus, in order to pass these tests, teamwork experience is undeniably an indispensable factor. Indeed, in today’s job market, being able to cooperate effectively in a group proves to be a must.
Moreover, joint endeavor of a team is superior to that of a single person. Occasionally, independent working, without barriers engendered by disagreement or controversy occurring during teamwork process, is admittedly unencumbered and expeditious in comparison with group working. Nevertheless, the competence of a collaborative group is evidently not confined to the ability of an individual. A team member’s strength is likely to compensate for the others’ weakness and vice versa which considerably promotes the personal ability of each teammate. For instance, ahead of a business proposal presentation session, a deft presenter whose shortcoming lies in computer techniques would definitely find the support from a colleague proficient in designing PowerPoint slideshow extremely precious; hence, the seamless cooperation between these two coworkers would probably produce fruitful results and gain notable success. In fact, a group of synergy is capable of making full use of teammates’ abilities to triumph.
The significance of teamwork skills in augmenting candidates’ employment opportunities and boosting working performance has increasingly exalted the position of this working method. Therefore, workers are strongly advised to hone teamwork capabilities to equip themselves with a powerful weapon in present-day highly competitive environment .
July 8th, 2008 on 15:48
Tea
Tea is the most widely consumed beverage in the world after the water and also is the most important traded commodity in the world after oil.
Tea is a drink made from the infusion of water and the leaves of an evergreen plant of the Camellia sinensin.
Like many great inventions tea was created completely by accident and the most famous legend of the origin of tea is the Chinese story of Shen Nung,(a Chinese ruler, herbalist, and scientist), which describes how tea leaves, blown by the wind, and accidently fell into his cup of hot water.
There are four major types of tea: White, Green, Oolong and Black. All of these teas come from the same tea plant, but they are processed differently.
Although tea is consumed everywhere, it is produced only in certain regions where the climates and the soil are ideal. The foremost tea regions are in: China, Japan, Taiwan, India and Sri Lanka.
China and Japan produced the finest green tea in the world. Taiwan has the best Oolongs. India and Sri Lanka are the home of the best black tea found anywhere.
Tea does not just taste great, it also offers health benefits to those who drink it, as in the following ways:
1- Tea contains natural antioxidants which are believed to neutralize the free radicals which play a role in development of certain types of cancer and heart diseases.
2- Tea also contains phytochemicals that help the body to fight certain cancers.
3- Grean tea helps to regulate the blood sugar levels and lowers blood pressure too.
4- Tea can help maintaining a healthy blood cholesterol levels.
5- Tea boosts the immune system to fight off infections.
6- Tea is also rich in Fluoride which is essential to prevent tooth decay and also for keeping the bones strong and healthy.
7- Finally, drinking tea contributes to maintaining the daily fluid balance.
July 9th, 2008 on 14:26
The second beverage in the world
Definition of tea
Tea: is a tree with a green leaves called “Camellia Sinensis” which grow in Asia.
Distribution of tea
The first who cultivated tea are Chinese while they are considered to have earliest records of drinking tea in the world.”Laozi” Chinese philosophers that describe tea as “The froth of the liquid jade” and named it elixir of life. For Arab and Europeans didn’t known to them only at seventeen century where the first shipment from China to Europe was in sixteen ten years ago.
Type of tea
There are four type of tea:-
1. Black tea: need boiling water because most of its effective substance doesn’t developed below 90° C.
2. Green tea: needed a lower temperature where the high qualities leaves the lower temperature as boiling water burning the leaves.
3. Oolong tea (Chinese tea): its name meaning a black dragon this type is semi_oxidizedand has a taste of green tea.
4. White or herbal tea: refers to infusion of fruit or herbs that contain no”Cmellia Sinensis”.
Advantage of tea
It has almost no carbohydrate, protein or fat. Also it’s the natural source of amino acid like (theanine, methylxanthine and theobromine) like in black tea, Polyphenolic antioxidant (catechins or tannins) which found with high concentration in white and green tea, contain either fluoride that found in the compressed tea that made from old leave and stems.
Disadvantage of tea
It contains a caffeine and bioflavonoid which causes a constipation, poor digestion, insomnia and diabetes.
Tea and health
Although these harmful substances found in tea, but there is a believable say that it’s play a role in:-
1. Prevention heart disease, some types of cancer and dental caries.
2. Cure of a headache.
3. Act as antifungal, insects, and bacterial agent.
4. Increasing the immunological capacity of the body, healing ulcer of mouth and hulls hair through its oil that extract from the bark of the tree.
July 9th, 2008 on 17:00
Higher education has occupied a vital position in academic system in recent decades. How to tailor a curriculum which delivers optimal learning experience to university students has become a thorny conundrum puzzling educators for years. A considerable number of educational institutions compel educatees to concentrate on merely one subject. However, I am convinced that at universities and colleges, students should be required to attend classes on a variety of subjects.
A diverse curriculum is certain to stimulate learners’ efforts to study. Although a single-subject curriculum is admittedly able to prompt undergraduates to channel the vast majority of energy to dig deeper into one subject and acquire profound comprehension, this monotonous syllabus might gradually bore students. Nonetheless, a multi-subject holistic? curriculum is capable of maintaining learners’ motivation for discovery and study. For instance, spending three or fours years at a college learning only one subject of business administration is definitely considered extremely tedious to a multitude of students whereas a syllabus that consists of varied subjects; for example, accounting, business law and international business is bound to elicit energetic learners’ thirst for discovery and exert greater attempts to further explore intriguing unfamiliar disciplines. In fact, a multi-subject curriculum unambiguously overwhelms a single-subject one vis-à-vis the encouragement of students’ inspiration to learn.
Combination of knowledge from a wide range of subjects represents a crucial factor leading an individual to success in today’s highly integrated society. Occasionally, mastering just one subject proves insufficient for a person to reach desired goals during his or her career; meanwhile, comprehensive and thorough understanding of related disciplines equips a learner with substantial advantages. For instance, to become professionals, students majoring in marketing need to be provided with expertise from an array of subjects such as sociology, psychology and law which allow potential marketers to duly determine targeted market segments, firmly grasp consumer’s buying behavior and deftly maneuver business regulations to gain competitive advantages against corporate rivals. Indeed, the modern world with a highly competitive environment creates a pressing demand for the perception of knowledge in multiple areas.
Not only does a multi-discipline curriculum evoke learners’ absorption in learning but a syllabus comprised of more than one subject also presents these You could be more specific. undergraduates with exhaustive knowledge in various fields of study. Thus, educators are strongly advised to widely apply this program to achieve fruitful results in higher education.
Celebrate your final draft, Quan. Fantastic!
July 9th, 2008 on 17:19
Illustrious figures that make considerable contributions to communities are often widely revered. Among a variety of manners to express great admiration for outstanding individuals is the construction of statues or monuments. Should I be in a position to issue a decision upon whose statue verb goes here to be built in my locality, President Hochiminh’s would undoubtedly become a prime option.
President Hochiminh is unambiguously a Vietnamese icon of extreme intelligence. The national hero is worldwide famous syntax… lexical development for his excellency. One of Hochiminh’s prominent abilities is linguistic command. Following years of traveling overseas, the President was reportedly fluent in over 10 languages, thanks to which he was able to write a large number of valuable works, both political and artistic, in various languages such as English, French and Chinese, and communicate effectively with a variety of world’s preeminent politicians on critical issues. Besides, President Hochiminh’s capability to convince people is proof of the leader’s intellectual competence. An obvious demonstration of his persuasiveness is the success in inducing the vast majority of Vietnamese people who were unduly repressed, frightened and persecuted under the vicious colonization of France then to audaciously revolt. Indeed, the intellectual superiority of the President Do you mean the position, title, or person? should be deemed an ultimate example for the city’s residents.
Another noble characteristic of President Hochiminh is reflected through his pure dedication to the country. The great leader expended the Don’t translate. whole youth seeking an appropriate course for the liberation of the nation and devoted the remainder (the rest?) Go with “remainder” since it is more formal than “the rest”. of his life to revolutionary cause. Despite facing numerous formidable obstacles from tremendous hardship to repeated imprisonment, he still pursued the goal of fighting for the independence of Vietnamese people. After the country already obtained freedom, as the most powerful leader, President Ho still garnered no privilege for himself but led (is “lived” possible here?) Yes. Just a difference in semantics. a simple life as an ordinary person. Thus, the President’s devotion and self-sacrifice to the country makes immense sense to generations of Vietnamese people.
President Hochiminh, who possesses extraordinary commitment to Verify your preposition. the sake of Vietnamese people and exceptional intellectual capability, completely deserves supreme honor This sounds like you are promoting him to a demigod. from the townspeople. Therefore, responsible officials are strongly advised to step up the construction of his statue.
July 9th, 2008 on 17:33
Working has occupied an integral position in society throughout history. Which working skill is the most important lexical development has been a thorny question perplexing people in recent decades. A significant number of opinions insist that individual excellence is the key to success. However, I am personally convinced the ability to work in collaborative groups proves to be a crucial factor in today’s modern world.
Capability to work in teams represents an essential skill to become successful in job-hunting. Employers, from modest to prestigious, are manifestly word choice considering teamwork skill Clear and concise, Quan. as a prerequisite during their recruitment. An applicant would definitely find himself redundant: him or herself or herself compelled to participate in a round of group discussion or presentation Plurality? whenever the candidate is tempted to obtain a lucrative position in a firm. Thus, in order to get wordy through selection process, experience of teamwork syntax is obviously an indispensable factor. Indeed, in today’s job market, being able to cooperate effectively in a group proves to be a must lexical development.
Moreover, performance of a team is superior to that of a single person Reword: syntax and lexical development.. Occasionally, independent work, without barriers engendered by disagreement or controversy occurring during teamwork process Clarify yourself., is unencumbered and expeditious in comparison with group work. Nevertheless, the competence of a collaborative group is not confined lexical development… change from passive to active voice. to the ability of each individual. A team member’s strength is likely to compensate for other teammates’ weakness and vice versa which considerably promotes the overall capability of a team. For instance, ahead of a business proposal presentation, a deft presenter whose shortcoming lies in computer skills would definitely find the support from a colleague proficient in designing PowerPoint invaluable; hence, the seamless cooperation between the Translating again? coworkers would probably You are saying that you haven’t researched anything and don’t know what you are talking about now. produce fruitful results and gain notable success. In fact, harmonious coordination of a group is capable of making full use of teammates’ abilities to triumph.
The significance of teamwork skills in augmenting candidates’ employment opportunities and boosting working performance has increasingly exalted the position of this Avoid demonstrative pronouns. working method. Therefore, workers are strongly advised to hone teamwork capabilities to equip themselves with a powerful weapon in today’s highly competitive workplace.
Good job, Quan. Now, just convince me.
July 12th, 2008 on 19:52
The second beverage in the world
Definition of tea
Tea: is a plant with green leaves called “Camellia Sinensis” which originate subject-verb agreement in Asia.
Distribution of tea
The earliest who cultivated tea were Chinese where they are temporal concordance considered to have earliest records of drinking tea in the world.“Laozi” syntax Chinese philosophers that described tea as “The froth of the liquid jade” and named it elixir of life. Tea was known lexical development to Arab and Europeans in the seventeenth century where was word choice the first shipment from China to Europe in one article usage thousand six hundred and ten years ago.
Types of tea
There are four types of tea:-
1. Black tea: aspectpreparing at higher temperature plurality because most of its active substance didn’t developed below 90° C.
2. Green tea: preparing at lower temperature where the higher quality of leaves the lower temperature as boiling water damage the leaves.
3. Oolong tea (Chinese tea): the term of “oolong” is word choice a black dragon this type is semi_oxidized and has a taste of green tea.
4. White or herbal tea: refers to infusion of fruit or herbs that contain no “Camellia Sinensis”.
Benefits of tea
Has almost no carbohydrate plurality marker, protein or fat. Also the natural source of amino acid like (theanine, methylxanthine and theobromine) like in black tea, Polyphenolic antioxidant (catechins or tannins) which found with high concentration in white and green tea, contain either fluoride that found lexical development in the compressed tea that made word choice from old leaves and stems.
Risks of tea
Contains a article usage caffeine and bioflavonoid which causes subject-verb agreement constipation, poor digestion, insomnia and diabetes.
Tea and health
Although these harmful substances occur in tea, but there is a scientific searcher lexical development improved that tea play a role in:-
1. Protection from heart disease, certain types of cancer and dental decay.
2. Cure of a headache.
3. Act subject-verb agreement as antifungal, insects, and bacterial agent.
4. Increasing the immunological capacity of the body, healing ulcer of mouth and hair crust Yara, what do you mean here? through oil that extract from the bark of the plant.
Yara, good work, but keep on revising.
July 13th, 2008 on 17:04
Tea is the most widely consumed beverage in the world after water and also is the most important traded commodity in the world after oil.
Tea is a drink made from the infusion of water and the leaves of an evergreen plant Camellia sinensin.
Like many great inventions tea was created completely by accident and the most famous legend of the origin of tea is the Chinese story of Shen Nung,(a Chinese ruler, herbalist, and scientist), which describes how tea leaves, blown by the wind and accidently orthography fell into his cup of hot water.
There are four major types of tea: white, green, oolong and black. All teas come from the same tea plant, but they are processed differently.
Although tea is consumed everywhere, tea is produced only in certain regions where climates and soil are ideal. The foremost tea regions are in China, Japan, Taiwan, India and Sri Lanka.
China and Japan produce the finest green tea in the world. Taiwan has the best Oolongs uncountable noun. India and Sri Lanka are the home of the best black tea found.
Tea does not just taste great, but also offers health benefits to those who drink tea, as in the following ways:
1- Tea contains natural antioxidants which are believed to neutralize the free radicals which play a role in development of certain types of cancer and heart diseases.
2- Tea also contains phytochemicals that help the body to fight certain cancers.
3- Green tea helps to regulate the blood sugar levels and lowers blood pressure.
4- Tea help subject-verb agreement maintaining healthy blood cholesterol levels.
5- Tea boosts the immune system to fight off infections.
6- Tea is also rich in fluoride which helps prevent tooth decay and is also essential for keeping bones strong and healthy.
7- Finally, drinking tea contributes to maintaining balance of daily fluid Plurality for generality, Berry..
Great improvement, Berry.
July 14th, 2008 on 15:47
Tea is the most widely consumed beverage in the world after water and also redundant is the most important traded commodity in the world after oil.
Tea is a drink made from the infusion of water and the leaves of an evergreen plant camellia sinensin.
Like many lexical development great inventions tea was created completely by accident and the most shuffle lexicon famous legend of the origin of tea is the Chinese story of Shen Nung,(a Chinese ruler, herbalist, and scientist), which describes how tea leaves, blown by the wind and fell into his cup of hot water.
There are four major types of tea: white, green, oolong and black. All teas come from the same tea plant, but they are processed differently.
Although tea is consumed everywhere, tea is produced only in certain regions where climates and soil are ideal. The foremost tea regions are in China, Japan, Taiwan, India and Sri Lanka.
China and Japan produce the finest green tea in the world. Taiwan has the best Oolong. India and Sri Lanka are the home of the best black tea found necessary?.
Tea does not just taste great Paraphrase with higher vocabulary., but also offers health benefits to those who drink tea Paraphrase., as in the following ways:
1- Tea contains natural antioxidants which are believed to neutralize the free radicals which play a role in development of certain types of cancer and heart diseases.
2- Tea also contains phytochemicals that help the body to fight certain cancers.
3- Green tea helps to regulate the unnecessary blood sugar levels and lowers blood pressure.
4- Tea helps maintaining Use the infinitive for generality. healthy blood cholesterol levels.
5- Tea boosts the immune system to fight off infections.
6- Tea is also Are you really saying anything with this? rich in fluoride which helps prevent tooth decay and is also essential for keeping bones strong and healthy.
7- Finally, drinking tea contributes to maintaining balance of daily fluids.
Good improvement. Now, show me what you can do.
July 15th, 2008 on 15:51
Tea is the most widely consumed beverage in the world after water and is the most important traded commodity in the world after oil.
Tea is a drink made from the infusion of water and the leaves of an evergreen plant Insert verb here.
camellia sinensin.
Like a large number of great inventions tea was created completely by accident and the famous legend of the origin of tea is word choice the Chinese story of Shen Nung,(a Chinese ruler, herbalist, and scientist), which describes how tea leaves, blown by the wind and Omit and correct punctuation. fell into his cup of hot water.
There are four major types of tea: white, green, oolong and black. All teas come from the same tea plant, but they are processed differently.
Although tea is consumed everywhere, tea is produced only in certain regions where climates and soil are ideal Paraphrase.. The foremost tea regions are in China, Japan, Taiwan, India and Sri Lanka.
China and Japan produce the finest green tea in the world. Taiwan has the best Oolong. India Can you connect these two sentences? and Sri Lanka are the home of the best black tea.
It is not only about the great taste Paraphrase., but tea also offers health benefits as in the following ways:
1- Tea contains natural antioxidants which are believed to neutralize the free radicals which play a role in development of certain types of cancer and heart diseases.
2- Tea also contains phytochemicals that help the body to fight certain cancers.
3- Green tea helps to regulate blood sugar levels and lowers blood pressure.
4- Tea helps maintenance of healthy blood cholesterol levels.
5- Tea boosts the immune system to fight off infections Consider using the singular here..
6- Tea is rich in fluoride which helps prevent tooth decay and is also essential for keeping bones strong and healthy.
7- Finally, drinking tea contributes to maintaining balance of daily fluids.
What do you think about that?…
Much better, Berry! Revise once more, if you like.
July 16th, 2008 on 23:11
The second beverage in the world
Definition of tea
Tea: is a plant with green leaves called “Camellia Sinensis” that grows in Asia.
Distribution of tea
The earliest who cultivated tea were Chinese where they were considered to have earliest records of drinking tea in the world.”Laozi” the Chinese philosopher, described tea as “The froth of the liquid jade” and named it elixir of life. The first shipment of tea from China to Arab noun needed and Europeans was in word choice 1610 years ago.
Types of tea
There are four types of tea:-
1. Black tea: the water for it should be added at the boiling point, because most of its active substance doesn’t develop word choice below 90° C.
2. Green tea: preparing past participle needed at lower temperature where the higher the quality of the leaves the lower the temperature. As boiling water damage subject-verb agreement the leaves.
3. Oolong tea (Chinese tea): “oolong” is lexical development a black dragon. This type is semi oxidized and has a taste of green tea.
4. White or herbal tea: refers to infusion of fruit or herbs that contain no “Camellia Sinensis”.
Benefits of tea
Has almost no protein or fat. Also the natural source of amino acid (theanine, methylxanthine and theobromine) like in black tea, Polyphenolic antioxidant (catechins or tannins) which occur with high concentration in white and green tea, contain either fluoride that occur in the compressed tea that comes from old leaves and stems.
Risks of tea
Contains caffeine and bioflavonoid which causing Use the simple present. constipation, poor digestion, insomnia and diabetes.
Tea and health
Although these harmful substances occur in tea, but there are a unnecessary scientific researches improved lexical development that tea play subject-verb agreement a role in:-
1. Protection from heart disease, certain types of cancer and dental decay.
2. Cure of a headache.
3. Acting as antifungal, insects, and bacterial agent.
Increasing the immunological capacity of the body, healing ulcer of mouth and hair crust What are you trying to say here? through oil that extract from the bark of the plant.
Teacher Eric:I wish that revision
to be less colored than the last one
Better work, Yara. Proofread your work before submission, please.
July 20th, 2008 on 22:28
The second beverage in the world
Definition of tea
Tea: is a plant with green leaves called “Camellia Sinensis”that grows in Asia.
Distribution of tea
The earliest who cultivated tea were Chinese where they were considered to have earliest records of drinking tea in the world.”Laozi” the Chinese philosopher, described tea as “The froth of the liquid jade” and named it elixir of life. The first shipment of tea from China to Arabs Arabia and Europe was in took place 1610 years ago.
Types of tea
There are four types of tea:-
1. Black tea: the water for it Water should be added at the boiling point, because most of its active substance plurality doesn’t develop below 90° C.
2. Green tea: prepare at lower temperature where the higher the quality of the leaves the lower the temperature. As boiling water damaging simple present, not the gerund, Yara… the leaves.
3. Oolong tea (Chinese tea): the “oolong” means a black dragon. This type is semi hyphenoxidized and has a taste of green tea.
4. White or herbal tea: refers to infusion of fruit or herbs that contain no “Camellia Sinensis”.
Benefits of tea
Has almost no protein or fat. Also the natural source of amino acid (theanine, methylxanthine and theobromine) like in black tea, Polyphenolic antioxidant (catechins or tannins) which occur with high concentration in white and green tea, contain either no choice following this phrase… fluoride that occur in the compressed tea that comes from old leaves and stems.
Risks of tea
Contains caffeine and bioflavonoid which cause constipation, poor digestion, insomnia and diabetes.
Tea and health
Although these harmful substances occur in tea, but there are wordy scientific researches found that tea playing role in:-
1. Protection from heart disease, certain types of cancer and dental decay.
2. Cure of a headache.
3. Acting as antifungal, insects, and bacterial agent.
Increasing the immunological capacity of the body, healing ulcer plurality of definite article needed mouth and dandruff through oil that extract past participle needed from the bark of the plant.
Review capitalization and punctuation rules, Yara.
July 21st, 2008 on 03:50
Tea
Tea is the most widely consumed beverage in the world after water and is the most important traded commodity in the world after oil.
Tea is a drink made from the infusion of water and the leaves of an evergreen plant known as camellia sinensis.
Like a large number of great inventions tea was created completely by accident and the famous legend of the origin of tea was lexical development the Chinese story of Shen Nung,(a Chinese ruler, herbalist, and scientist), which describes how tea leaves blown by the wind and then clear and concise fell into his cup of hot water.
There are four major types of tea: white, green, oolong and black. All teas come from the same tea plant, but they are processed differently.
Although tea is consumed everywhere, tea is produced only in certain regions where conditions are ideal.
The foremost tea regions are in China, Japan, Taiwan, India and Sri Lanka.
China and Japan produce the finest green tea in the world. Taiwan has the best Oolong, while India and Sri Lanka are the home of the best black tea.
In addition to great taste, tea offers health benefits as in the following ways:
1- Tea contains natural antioxidants which are believed to neutralize the free radicals which play a role in development of certain types of cancer and heart diseases.
2- Tea also contains phytochemicals that help the body to fight certain cancers.
3- Green tea helps to regulate blood sugar levels and lowers blood pressure.
4- Tea helps maintenance of healthy blood cholesterol levels.
5- Tea boosts the immune system to fight off infection.
6- Tea is rich in fluoride which helps prevent tooth decay and is also essential for keeping bones strong and healthy.
7- Finally, drinking tea contributes to maintaining balance of daily fluids.
What do you think about that?…
Congratulations, Berry, on a job well done.
July 26th, 2008 on 15:09
Horses
Horses and human have lived and worked together for thousands of years. Most horses perform work such as carrying human, harnessed to pull carts or plows, horses can be specialized according to certain tasks: lighter horses for racing or riding, heavier horses for farming, miniature horses kept as pets. In some societies both meat and milk of horses used as a source of food. Depending on breed and environment, the domestic horse has a life expectancy of 25 to 30 years. The following terminology is used to describe horses of various ages:
Foal: a horse of either sex less than one year old
Yearling: a horse of either sex that is between one and two years old.
Colt: a male horse under the age of four.
Filing: a female horse under the age of four.
Mare: a female horse four years old and older.
Stallion: a colt over the age of three.
Gelding: a castrated male horse of any age.
Size of horses.
Hand: is a unit of length measurement, today the hand is used to describe the highest of horses, ponies. One hand equals four inches, and the horse is measured from the ground to the top of the withers. A pony is up to 14.2 hh but animal taller than 14.2 hh is classified as horse.
Colors and markings.
A horse is first described by its coat color and distinctive markings. The most common horse colors are (bay, chestnut, gray), also they have some markings which present at the birth and do not change over the course life of the horse, can be seen on the face, leg and on the coronary band just above the hoof.
Horses and human.
Horses are also social creatures that are able to form companionship attachments to their own species and to other animals, including humans. They communicate through nickering or whinnying, touch, nuzzling, smell, mutual grooming and body language.
The ability of human to work in cooperation with the horse is based on both the natural curiosity of the horse and the strong social bonds that horses have with each other, therefore, many horse training principle are based upon having the horse accept a human as the dominant herd member and, this not done by force but by the horse developing trust in the human and confidence that the human will be a “herd leader”.
Finally: horses are a wonderful example for human can be follow in the patience, courage, confidence, intelligence, tact, pride and devotion. If you want to understand horses looking for eyes which speaks without words
July 30th, 2008 on 22:32
Butterfly
Butterflies are wonderful animals to look at when they flutter around, tasting some nectar here and there. Additionally, they serve to pollinate the plants. Butterfly’s wings are covered with scales that overlapped to provide colors and beautiful patterns. The patterns on the top and bottom of their wings are usually different from male and female. The butterfly life cycle may take from one to an entire year, for the transformation of the caterpillar into an adult butterfly it go through four stages (egg – larva – pupa – adult). Some species need up to seven years to become an adult butterfly.
They range in size from a tiny 1/8 inch to 12 inches. The world’s largest butterfly (Queen Alexandra’s Birdwing) can be up to 11 inches.
Butterflies:
• People used to think butterflies were witches or fairies in disguise stealing butter, cream, and milk. This could also be the reason of the name butterfly.
• Active during in the day.
• Most have slender, hairless bodies.
• Rest with wings closed above their body.
• Antennae, like thread with a knot at the end.
• Are usually brightly colored.
• Are cold-blooded and seek shelter in cold and wet weather.
• They can’t fly if their body temperature falls below 30 (C).
• Always have their eyes open and don’t sleep, they can see (red, orange, yellow) colors.
• Most adult butterflies’ life one or two weeks.
• Use flower nectar as a food source especially the nectar of “blossoms“.
• Use their suckers to suck up liquid to maintain their water balance and energy stores.
• protect from their predators by:
o Big eyes: appearing suddenly when the butterfly open its wings scare attacking birds and others giving the impression of the head.
o Mimicry: bright colors and contrasts often are a warning to predators that the butterfly is poisonous.
o Camouflage: butterfly makes itself invisible.
• Symbols of ecological harmlessness, lightness, airiness, cleanness, freedom, detachment and nature.
Butterflies and humans:
Researchers examine the surface of butterflies’ wings as possible model for future computer chips. The wings can absorb light to get the heat which is essential for the animals to survive where the distance of the ribs on the scales’ surface has about the same size as the wave-length of the absorbed light. So this surface could enable the chip to dissipate that heat easily.
Finally: if you have a garden, it’s easy to make them visit it, if you consider some aspects. It’s time to make your garden a little paradise.
Interesting topic, Yara.
August 16th, 2008 on 18:52
Advertising sector has been burgeoning over the past decades with contents comprehensively covering diverse aspects of life. National image is no exception. A considerable number of opinions strongly deprecate the advertising of a country’s image. However, I am personally convinced that this practice to certain extent is able to provide plenty of useful information about a nation.
Advertising operations are liable to significantly boost a country’s identity in the world. Original promotion video clips aired on famous television channels are likely to project a nation’s profile in a unique manner which distinguishes the country’s image from others’. One typical example is the case of Vietnam’s promotional campaign containing a brief clip broadcast on CNN which helped renovate the false perception of numerous international citizens that the country remained a miserable battlefield and construct Vietnam’s description as a hospitable destination. In fact, properly organized advertising campaigns possess a formidable power to favorably alter the impression about a nation.
Promotional campaigns also present international communities with a glance at a country’s economic policy. A government is almost always tempted to tout the domestic business climate as “international-investment-friendly” to magnetize the biggest possible flows of investment capital. In this case, advertising proves just a congruous means to provide global investors with a cursory look at the allure of an investment destination. Take for instance the Indonesian advertisement on Bloomberg, BBC and CNN which was part of an enormous effort to successfully promote the country’s favorable investment environment in the eyes of world’s business circles. Indeed, the advertising of a nation’s economic conditions is able to make a remarkable contribution to the economy in a sense.
Not only are promotional activities instrumental in engendering a country’s distinctive image but advertising also depicts a charming portrait of a local investment climate. Thus, promotional operations of this kind would definitely thrive in the coming years on the back of rapid globalization process.
Good work, Quan. Revise and remember to use plurality for generalisms.
August 19th, 2008 on 16:42
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Not only are promotional activities instrumental in engendering a country’s distinctive image but advertising also depicts a charming portrait of a local investment climate. Thus, promotional operations of this kind would definitely thrive in the coming years on the back of rapid globalization.
Better, Quan. Now, get serious.
August 22nd, 2008 on 16:57
The advertising sector has been burgeoning over the past decades with contents comprehensively covering diverse aspects of life. National image is no exception. A host of opinions strongly deprecate the advertising of a country’s profile. However, I am personally convinced that this practice to some extent is able to provide plenty of practical information about a nation.
Advertising operations are liable to significantly boost a country’s identity in the world. Original video clips aired on famous television channels are sure to project a nation’s profile in an innovative manner which makes the country’s image distinguished. Vietnam’s promotional campaign containing a brief broadcast on CNN, for example, helped renovate the false perception of numerous international citizens that the country remained a miserable battlefield and construct Vietnam’s description as a hospitable tourist destination. In fact, properly organized advertising campaigns possess a formidable power to favorably alter the impression about a nation.
Promotional campaigns also present international communities with a glance at a country’s economic policy. Governments are inclined to tout domestic business climate as “international adverb needed here -investment-friendly” to magnetize massive flows of investment capital. In this case, advertising proves just a congruous means to provide global investors with a cursory look at the allure of an investment destination. Take for instance the Indonesian advertisement on Bloomberg, BBC, and CNN which was part of an enormous effort to successfully promote the country’s favorable investment environment in the eyes of world business circles. Indeed, in a sense this shows probability, the advertising of a nation’s economic conditions is able to make a remarkable contribution to the economy.
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Great work, Quan!
August 29th, 2008 on 19:23
How to live a meaningful life has long been a thorny conundrum perplexing numerous people for generations. A number of kind of redundant here individuals just adopt a leisurely lifestyle, expending their time in a lethargic manner. However, I am personally convinced that living a brisk life makes far more significant unnecessary sense.
Only through accelerating the pace of living, are people capable of completing a wide range of duties. Nowadays, each person is supposed to confront a variety of responsibilities pertaining to diverse roles in the article usage modern society. In Vietnam, for instance, a man might be compelled to deal with an array of responsibilities: sharing daily burdens with his wife as a husband, tending his son and daughters as a father, holding being held accountable for his job as an employee, taking care of his parents as a son etc. Thus, to become responsible, an individual, more often than not, has no other choices but steps up word choice his or her life to assume and fulfill a host of duties properly. In fact, the diversity of social positions with various responsibilities required people to take up an expeditious life.
In addition, a dynamic lifestyle proves to be a key to success in highly competitive businesses. Given the ever-increasing number of talented rivals in the workplace, the competitiveness within firms has grown more severe than ever before. For example, an excellent graduate who enters a prestigious financial institution such as HSBC would be certainly forced to make tremendous attempts to vie with a considerable number of other similarly outstanding colleagues. In this strenuous competition, one appropriate measure to gain the upper hand and succeed in climbing up the corporate ladder in such a giant is to demonstrate personal dynamism and activeness through an energetic way of working and living. Actually, vigorous performers are always deemed a treasure to any organizations.
Not only does an active way of life enable persons people: “persons” shows discrimination to complete their duties but this living style is also able to lead an individual to triumph. Therefore, embracing a hectic and vibrant life is strongly advisable.
Much better, Quan.
September 1st, 2008 on 04:56
As a transition country, Vietnam is currently beset by a startling array of perplexing issues that range across nearly all socio-economic aspects. A considerable number of opinions might give the priority to an ailing national economy undergoing an inclement period, a poor healthcare system being subject to intense public censure, a degrading living environment facing numerous grave threats as a consequence of unsystematic economic development or a backward information technology industry fumbling for a congruous orientation. However, I am personally convinced that the problem which must be placed at the top of the agenda is Vietnam’s underdeveloped educational system.
Education proves a vital factor which engenders far-reaching influences on various areas of any countries in general and Vietnam in particular. Actually, the stable and sustainable development of socio-economic fields always requires competent human resources which are the immediate result of the learning system. For the national economy to flourish, visionary policy-makers and economists are necessary; for the medical care system to improve, moral and proficient physicians are required, for industrial operations to become greener, the amelioration of public awareness and a substantial number of knowledgeable activists are essential; for the information technology industry to thrive, an army of excellent “ITers” is crucial. In the case of Vietnam, the metamorphosis of the country from an agriculture-based economy to an intelligence-based one obviously necessitates enormous high-quality human forces that absolutely hinge on the nation’s learning system. Thus, education evidently plays a pivotal role in Vietnam’s development process.
In that context, the domestic education and training system remains far from able to meet the exigent demand of development. In fact, Vietnam’s educational area, which should have acted as a solid foundation for the country’s prosperity, is manifestly being plagued by a multitude of internal shortcomings, from elementary to higher learning. At primary, secondary and tertiary schools, students are forced to endure a taxing course-load encompassing up to eleven subjects, each of which demands unfledged learners to possess a staggering amount of knowledge. Nevertheless, the quality of education is less than as expected when students fail to retain much of what they are taught due to monotonous and outdated teaching methodology. Continual and desultory reforms of teaching curricula and standardized graduation exams, especially the university entrance exam have also been perturbing both students and their parents. Besides, at higher education, a paucity of essential facilities and capable lecturers, the failure of higher learning institutions to motivate a significant part of student circles and the so-called “reverse funnel” educational model have induced numerous complaints about the quality of the country’s human resources. These practices have been exposed to fierce denunciation over the past years; nonetheless, relevant agencies have so far appeared to ignore that outcry. Indeed, the weakness of the local educational system has emerged as a formidable obstacle to Vietnam’s overall development and deeper integration into the world.
Rectifying the abysmal domestic teaching system is a daunting affair which involves huge time and endeavor. Thus, proposing concrete measures to drag the system out of the current morass is seemingly impossible; nevertheless, a couple of suggestions should be taken into consideration. In lieu of exerting tremendous attempts to improvise and patch up the present shabby educational network, why not just mimic and adapt some international curricula and educational model that already yielded fruitful results; for example, those of Western nations, for Vietnam’s situation? Another recommendation is devising a specific and systematic plan to promote a host of “ideal” or “exemplary” educational institutions and gradually expanding this paradigm on a nationwide scale in the long run. In addition, the partial equitization and decentralization of universities and colleges to transfer further autonomy to the learning institutions and present greater incentives in the sphere of education are also strongly advised.
Vietnamese people’s intelligence potential is clearly far from inferior to that of other nations; then, why does the country remain falling behind the majority of the world? For Vietnam to catch up with and eventually outstrip other countries, the optimization of the domestic human resources is a must. Hence, the profound concentration on the educational cause, though strenuous and challenging, is worthwhile.
Really great beginning and interesting article. Review semicolon rules.
September 4th, 2008 on 16:47
Hi,T Eric and all
This is my diary in early August
Japanese summer is very muggy.
I went to Kujiyu last weekend with German graduate school students. Since Kujiyu is at highland, temperature was not high and there were no mesquites there. I was very comfortable. But I returned to hot humid summer in the city now.
Welcome to my blog, aka ken!
September 5th, 2008 on 16:48
How to live a meaningful life has long been a thorny conundrum perplexing numerous people for generations. Some stylistic concerns individuals just adopt a leisurely lifestyle, expending their time in a lethargic manner. However, I am personally convinced that living a brisk life makes far more sense.
Only through accelerating the pace of living Is this even possible?, are people capable of completing a wide range of duties. Nowadays, each person is supposed to confront a variety of responsibilities pertaining to diverse roles in modern society. In Vietnam, for instance, a man might be compelled to deal with an array of responsibilities: sharing daily burdens with his wife as a husband, tending preposition needed his son and daughters as a father, being held accountable for his job as an employee, taking care of his parents as a son and so on this means one of either two things: you don’t know how to say it in English or you have nothing to really say: be clear and concise.. Thus, to become responsible, an individual, more often than not, has no other choice but pace him or herself to assume and fulfill a host of duties properly. In fact, the diversity of social positions with various responsibilities requires people to take up an expeditious life.
In addition, a dynamic lifestyle proves to be a key to success in highly competitive businesses. Given the ever-increasing number of talented rivals in the workplace, the competitiveness within firms has grown more severe than ever before. For example, an excellent graduate who enters a prestigious financial institution such as HSBC would be certainly forced to make tremendous attempts to vie with a considerable number of similarly outstanding colleagues. In this strenuous competition, one appropriate measure to gain the upper hand and succeed in climbing up the corporate ladder in such a giant is to demonstrate personal dynamism and activeness through an energetic way of working and living. Actually, vigorous performers are always deemed a treasure to any organizations you have to use the singular with “any”….
Not only does an active way of life enable people to complete their duties but this living style is also able to lead an individual to triumph. Therefore, embracing a hectic and vibrant life is strongly advisable.
Good job, Quan. Now, let’s focus on another piece.
September 5th, 2008 on 17:28
As a transitional country, Vietnam is currently beset by a startling array of perplexing issues that range across nearly all socioeconomic aspects. A considerable number of opinions might give priority to an ailing national economy undergoing an inclement period, a poor health care system being subject to intense public censure, a degrading living environment facing numerous grave threats as a consequence of unsystematic economic development or a backward information technology industry fumbling for congruous orientation. However, I am personally convinced that the problem which must be placed at the top of the agenda is Vietnam’s underdeveloped educational system.
Education proves a vital factor which engenders far-reaching influences on various areas of any country and Vietnam in particular world-wide. Actually, the stable and sustainable development of socioeconomic fields always requires competent human resources which are the immediate result of the learning system domestic education system. For the national economy to flourish, visionary policy-makers and economists are necessary, for the medical care system to improve, moral and proficient physicians are required, for industrial operations to become greener, the amelioration of public awareness and a substantial number of knowledgeable activists are essential, for the information technology industry to thrive, an army of excellent “ITers” is crucial. In the case of Vietnam, the metamorphosis of the country from an agriculture-based to an industry-based and ultimately an intelligence-based economy would obviously necessitate enormous high-quality human forces that absolutely hinge on the nation’s learning system learning strategies/ methodologies. Thus, education evidently plays a pivotal role in Vietnam’s development process.
In that context, domestic education and training system remains far from able to meet the exigent demand redundant of development. In fact, Vietnam’s educational area, which should have acted as a solid foundation for the country’s prosperity, is manifestly being plagued by a multitude of internal shortcomings, from elementary to higher learning. At primary, secondary and tertiary schools, students are forced to endure a taxing course-load encompassing up to eleven subjects, each of which demands unfledged learners to possess a staggering amount of knowledge. Nevertheless, the quality of education is less than as expected when students fail to retain much of what they are taught due to monotonous and outdated obsolete teaching methodology. Continual and desultory reforms of teaching curricula and standardized graduation exams, especially the university entrance exams have also been perturbing both students and their parents. Besides, at higher education, a paucity of essential facilities and capable lecturers, the failure of higher learning institutions to motivate a significant part of student circles and the so-called “reverse funnel” educational model have induced numerous complaints about the quality of the country’s human resources. These practices have been exposed to fierce denunciation over the past years; nonetheless, relevant agencies have so far appeared to ignore that outcry. Indeed, the weakness of the local educational system has emerged as a formidable obstacle to Vietnam’s overall development and deeper integration into the world.
Rectifying the abysmal domestic teaching system is a daunting affair which involves unduly enduring endeavors. Thus, proposing concrete measures to drag the system out of the current morass is seemingly impossible; nevertheless, a couple of suggestions should be taken into consideration. In lieu of exerting tremendous attempts to patch up the present shabby educational network, why not adapt certain international curricula and educational model that already yielded fruitful results; for example, those of Western nations, for Vietnam’s situation? Another recommendation is devising a specific and systematic plan to promote a host of “ideal” or “exemplary” educational institutions and gradually expanding this paradigm on a nationwide scale in the long run. In addition, partial equitization (this is a term coined by the Vietnamese government which somewhat means privatization of state-owned-enterprises) and decentralization of universities and colleges to transfer further autonomy to the learning institutions and present greater incentives in the sphere of education are also strongly advised.
Vietnamese intelligence potential is clearly far from inferior to that of other nations; then, why does the country remain falling behind the majority of the world? For Vietnam to catch up with and eventually outstrip other countries, the optimization of domestic human resources is a must. Hence, profound concentration on local education, though strenuous and challenging, is worthwhile.
Fantastic, Quan. Time to move on to another piece.
September 5th, 2008 on 18:06
definite article SEADS 2008 Conference is sure to offer Vietnamese students engaging in the occasion paraphrase a variety of significant opportunities. Intrigued by the potential benefits, after searching for certain relevant information, I have come to a decision to apply for the participation in the Conference.
Getting involved in SEADS 2008, I would definitely be able to communicate with dynamic and active participants from various backgrounds. The intensive interaction with American students and international illustrious syntax: place before “international” figures through the Conference’s activities is bound to present me with an invaluable chance to enjoy the exchange of cultural values, understandings and language. Besides, working and teaming up with active and excellent lexical development Vietnamese young people taking part in the Conference would be surely an exhilarating and practical pragmatic experience.
The central agenda of SEADS 2008, covering a diversity of regional development topics, is another factor inspiring me to make an effort to participate in the event. Via the combination of lectures, discussions and activities, a deeper perception of the burning issues confronting ASEAN countries and particularly Vietnam is certain to be disseminated. As a student majoring in international business and economics, I would unequivocally find the insights uncountable noun gained from the Conference of great use lexical development in the future.
Now, make it better, Quan.
September 22nd, 2008 on 20:16
Imagine
This song is like an anthem for wishing world peace in the world now. It is the most successful song among John Lennon’s tunes and one of the most popular songs in 20th century. The reason why this song is popular is that be clear and concise, aka ken… this song has indefinite article simple and clear message for world peace.
When John wrote this song in the early 70s, he and his wife Yoko Ono were involved with anti war movements and liberal social movements. Some of his songs’ lyrics had a direct social message like Women is the Nigger of the World, and Power to the People. Although core fans of him could follow these message songs, some fans of him could not follow these message What do you mean here? songs. His record sales reduced because these songs were too heavy for pop music fans. John was not only the biggest rock charisma but also a pop idle. He felt dilemma between his bilateral personas before he wrote Imagine. This song is a solution for his dilemma. He noticed that even if his song has a strong political message, if he sugar coated these political message, a lot of people will hear his message. Therefore, he does not sing agitational phrase in this song. Instead of agitation, beautiful lyrical lines suggest his social message. I think that this way is very indefinite article clever way to send his message to people in the world. John is popular with people all over the world. His hit tunes are very influential on people’s minds. He could use his popularity to send his social message to world people. Actually, this sugar coated political song became a standard number for wishing world peace now.
When the Beatles indulged in a psychedelic movement, John’s lyrics were rather rhetorical like I am the walrus. After the Beatles broke up, John suffered a serious break down. He and Yoko were seen in a psychotherapy is called the Primal Scream by Arthur Janov. In this therapy, Janov examined the relation of John’s childhood’s trauma and his nervous breakdown. Janov thinks that if human repressed their childhood’s trauma in his mind, that complex would cause mental disorder. Therefore, Janov tries to release his patients’ pain (primal scream) from their mind mentally and physically.
Actually, after John was seen in this therapy, his lyrics changed dramatically. He began to use simple but strong words in his lyrics like the songs are called Mother, Love, and God.
At that time, he encountered Japanese culture through Yoko. I presume that Yoko’s art works and Japanese Haiku influenced on the way of sophistication of Imagine. In Haiku, poets have to make their poem in a short sentence. Naturally, Haiku poets try to express their sense in a short simple sentence. I feel this Haiku’s sense in Imagine and another John’s tune Love.
Talking about Yoko’s influence, the concept of Imagine is similar to Yoko’s concept. She thinks the power of our imagination causes actual change of our society. She believes that if many people imagined the peaceful world, the world will be pacific. Another influence of Yoko on this song appears preposition the line “Above us only sky”. According to indefinite article BBC interview with Yoko Ono, she had to evacuate from Tokyo at a risk from air attack during the World War 2. She always felt hunger at that time. Many people faced a serious situation but only the sky gave them a freedom. Since then, she has been obsessed to see the sky. After the war, she held the sky-viewing workshop in a Buddhist temple as her artwork.
John must hear this episode from her. Actually, article beautiful picture of the sky appears prepositionthe cover of his live album in Peace Concert in Toronto and on the cover of Imagine album. The clouds-like object flows on John’s face on the album cover of Imagine. It seems like “John in the Sky with Peace”. The sky is universal scene. Everybody can see the sky everywhere on the earth. The sky is fair to everyone. Thus this song’s message is clear. John says in this song that if many people could imagine article peaceful world, someday our world will be as one like the sky.Fantastic, aka ken! You need to review the grammar rules for indefinite and definite article usage.
September 24th, 2008 on 20:19
Comma usage in English language
When we write we suffer from uncontrollable comma usade, or incapacity of adding a comma because we are not sure when to use commas.
First, we need to know what is comma? Why it should be used? But to understand that we have to explain what the purpose of punctuation is?
Punctuation has two purposes:
a- T o help the reader.
b- To convey to the reader how to read what is written.
The comma (,) is a punctuation mark used in many languages for seperating things. The word comma comes from the Greek word “Komma”, which means something cut off or a short clause.
Many people think that a comma is used only if there is a pause. This is incorrect, but those who follow that rule will not go far wrong.
The comma has several uses in English:
1- Introductory words and phrases.
Example:
Once upon a time, there was a brave knight….
2- Parenthetical phrases; which means information that is unnecessary to the meaning of the sentence is enclosed by commas.
Example:
I think, yes, that it is true.
* But keep in mind that: Dates and titles are usually parenthetic.
Examples:
Well, Sarah, this is a fine mess that you are in.
Wednesday, September 24, 2008
3- Use commas to separate two independent clauses (A group of words that function as a sentence) when they are joined by any of these seven coordinating conjunctions:
For, or, nor, so, but, yet, and.
Example:
The situation is perilous, but there is still one chance of escape.
4- Use commas to separate items in a list of three or more.
Example:
The French and American flags are red, white, and blue.
5- Used when writing names that are presented last names first.
Example:
Smith, John
6- In representing large numbers. This is almost done for numbers of six or more digits where separating each group of three digits.
Example:
9,358,471
7- A comma is used to set off all geographical items.
Example:
Friendswood, Texas.
Hope you find that useful…
Good job, Berry. Interesting that you would have a comma error while writing about commas.
October 4th, 2008 on 19:09
Comma usage in English language
When we write, we suffer from uncontrollable comma usage, or incapacity of adding a comma because we are not sure when to use commas.
First, we need to know what is comma? Why it should be used? But to understand that we have to explain what the purpose of punctuation is?
Punctuation has two purposes:
a- To help the reader.
b- To convey to the reader how to read what is written.
The comma (,) is a punctuation mark used in many languages for seperating things. The word comma comes from the Greek word “Komma”, which means something cut off or a short clause.
Many people think that a comma is used only if there is a pause. This is incorrect, but those who follow that rule will not go far wrong.
The comma has several uses in English:
1- Introductory words and phrases.
Example:
Once upon a time, there was a brave knight….
2- Parenthetical phrases; which means information that is unnecessary to the meaning of the sentence is enclosed by commas.
Example:
I think, yes, that it is true.
* But keep in mind that: Dates and titles are usually parenthetic.
Examples:
Well, Sarah, this is a fine mess that you are in.
Wednesday, September 24, 2008
3- Use commas to separate two independent clauses (A group of words that function as a sentence) when they are joined by any of these seven coordinating conjunctions:
For, or, nor, so, but, yet, and.
Example:
The situation is perilous, but there is still a chance of escape.
4- Use commas to separate items in a list of three or more.
Example:
The French and American flags are red, white, and blue.
5- Used when writing names that are presented last names first.
Example:
Smith, John
6- In representing large numbers. This is almost done for numbers of six or more digits where separating each group of three digits.
Example:
9,358,471
7- A comma is used to set off all geographical items.
Example:
Friendswood, Texas.
I think it is better now, isn’t it? …
Much better, Berry.
October 8th, 2008 on 13:46
Sound imitators.
Some linguists have argued that language is a unique human behavior and that animal communication falls short of human language.
Although imitating sound is not a simple matter as some people believe, some birds are able to mimic human speech with great clarity.
This talent to imitate, which observed in some bird species, is not an ability that can be acquired by coincidence.
For a bird to reproduce a sound (a word or a melody) it has heard, it requires:
1- Excellent hearing organs.
2- High level of consciousness in terms of tone, stress, and expression.
3- Good memory to be able to remember and repeat the sounds it has heard.
4- Strong power of observation .
For example, Lyre bird is able to mimic the sounds of: camera, camera shutters, rifle shots, and car alarms. Which proves that this bird is intelligent and does have not a simple or a primitive brain and that is a manifest evidence of the great ability to learning.